intruder at the gate
of unexpressed desires
demonstrator behind barriers
of swell and fall unconscious
i realise differences of state
are the hardest separations
i’d lie beside you
if i thought our dreams would unite
for without that
sleep is a shared oblivion
Reblogged this on mihran Kalaydjian and commented:
watching you sleep
Mihrank, thank you
Short, kicky!
Aina, thank you for the support
Nice.
Especially like: “swell and fall unconscious”
Bruce, thanks for reading and for liking
Indeed. It’s hard to connect with people at different states no matter how physically close they are.
Thank you for that fine comment
“differences of state are the hardest separations,” so true. What a lovely, delicate, wistful poem; beautiful, John.
Willow, I felt it would appeal to your fine sensibilities.
Thank you
John
Wonderfull poem, I like it a lot
Thank you, Gys, for reading and liking
Best wishes to you
John
Like the soft underside, vulnerable. Wanton. Beautiful.
Gina, Friend,
Thank you
this is quite deep and also a bit scary.
Thank you, Gav, for this interesting comment. How readers see things in different ways is always satisfying.
I agree with sedge808, a bit scary.
Myra,
You’ve overwhelmed me once more with your generosity of spirit and I like the way you interpret even if I didn’t intend it to be scary in any way.
Great that you see it the way you do
Ever
John
Powerful, bleak and slighrly melancholic – but ultimately truthful. Definitely a poem to return to.
Good work, John.
Chris, thank you so much for those insightful remarks
My best to you
John
So deep and beautiful..I am truly touched when reading it. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
Indah,
As ever, generous and very kind.
Thank You
beautifully profound John, very fine writing.
Hollie, high praise indeed and coming from you deeply appreciated.
I tried accessing your blog yesterday and once again got a ‘oops, blah blah.. message..have no idea what’s happening but it’s likely to be my glitchy connection. Sorry, My Friend, about that.
Absolutely beautiful and impressive, dear John… The last stanza really stands out!.
Thanks for sharing this jewel.
Best wishes to you, always, Aquileana 😛
So so kind of you, Aquileana, to respond the way you have, I appreciate your comments deeply.
Take the very best care.
John
Achingly beautiful Winnie says with a sense of unrequited love and longing and as we both know Winnie is never wrong!!!
Superb poem, Sir
Tell Winnie i am honoured and my thanks to you, generous as always
love to you both
john
Brother John, no doubt on your creation. You are a marvelous poet, I must quote that. Your poems inspires me. I usually read them on my evenings. They are always great.. full of meanings and imagination.
Well, My Best to you!!! Swetank 🙂
Brother Swetank,
You are always there for me and that kind of support is a great encouragement to keep going.
THANK YOU
john
So lyrical, and thought-provoking. I like this a lot, John.
Generous and kind of you, Kate, to say so